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This text deals with migrant workers of Bangladesh who go abroad tosouthest Asia or the middle East, for send money to their family andthus , make a living .
Moreover this remittances have a greatimpact on the situation economic, indeed , the remittances are thecountry’s second largest source of foreign revenu. Thanks to money,have seen appareced(?) more rooms on their houses, a color television,a fluffy fleece blanket from Malaysia.
Thanks to the globalization, people go abroad the world is open to them.
Some of them succeed nevertheless other come back in their country of origin empty-handed and go back to working the fields
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pour envoyer = to send (et non pas for)
and thus make a living = problème logique, ce n'est pas en envoyant de l'argent à leurs familles qu'ils gagnent leur vie (cause/conséquence).
ces transferts = these remittances (these = ces, this = cet)
les transferts = remittances
Thanks to money = grace à l'argent, mais il faudrait spécificer de laquelle on parle.
have seen appareced = t'aurais pas pu chercher dans le dico?
Thanks to the globalisation = en anglais l'article défini est zappé lorsque l'on parle de phénomenes généraux comme la globalisation. ex: organised crime (le crime organisé), infant mortality (la mortalité infantile), etc.
come vs return:
Citation :
verb ( past came |keɪm|; past part. come ) [ intrans. ]
1 move or travel toward or into a place thought of as near or familiar to the speaker : Jessica came into the kitchen | they came here as immigrants | he came rushing out.
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Correction proposée:
Citation :
This text deals with migrant workers from Bangaldesh, who go abroad - mostly to Southeast Asia or the Middle East - to earn a living and send money back to their families.
These remittances have a great impact on the economic situation; in Bangladesh, they are the country's second largest source of foreign revenue. Families have used this money to add rooms to their houses, buy colour televisions, or buy such luxuries as fluffy fleece blankets from Malaysia.
Thanks to globalisation, workers can go abroad - the world is open to them.
Some of them succeed; however (/nevertheless), others return to their country of origin empty-handed and go back to working in the fields.
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Pense à chercher dans le dictionnaire, faire gaffe à la ponctuation et surtout.. éviter de réflechir en français!
Message édité par fzzbnn le 14-01-2008 à 13:18:05
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