Bonjour,
J'avais une rédaction à faire mais je ne suis pas très bonne en anglais, j'aimerai donc que mon devoir soit corriger un minimum.  
Si quelqu'un pourrait m'aider, ça serait gentil. Je mettrai le dialogue si quelqu'un veut bien m'aider ..
Merci d'avance!
 

Allez, envoie

Ana arrives at home and she heads towards the door.
"Mum! Mum! It's you ? Angel says surprised."" Yes It's me" She says smiling and takes her daughter in the arm.
Her son, who heard his mother, runs to his mother.
"Mum mum! I missed you if you knew ! ""Yoo too, I missed my family. Come children we going into the house to our grandmother. Where is she ?"" She is in the living room, she reats."" But I hear my daughter speak or I dreaming ?" She says joyful. "It's me Ana. You don't dream. I am good in front of you."" But.. But how it is that you are here ? You should not be in the United States ? And you must not work " " No because I came back to Mexico because I needed to see you. I missed you too much. I therefore decided to take the risk of coming back" " They needed also to see you if you knew. It's so long that we don't see you. You was present that but the sending of gift and money. There was a big lack. " " I know, I hope despite my absence that the children always love me and that they understand this situation "
" This will untersand all sacrifice which you made for your family. Wa can be very graceful to you for this. Thank's for you we are not poor but now are unhappy because you are not with us. We can be also proud " " If only I had not to go to work illegaly, I could come see you more often. She says sadly to his mother looking her children. " You are going leave again?" " Yes I think " " How did you come her ? " As I went to the United States. I was hide me in a car then I accrossed the desert and finaly I crawled in a draipipe"

 
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Merci pour votre aide ! Et oui drôle d'histoire