Bonjour, Quelqu'un pourrait-il me corriger ce texte s'il vous plaît?  
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Yes, I would fight to carry something which one likes, because one is in a democracy, and one thus has the right to be able to wear clothing that one desire. Moreover, as one can see it in the book, the girls were obliged to wear a skirt all the year, which in winter could be difficult and unpleasant. I find, to be able to get dressed as have the desire, is a manner of expressing themselves, and of being able to show his mood. For example in black if one is sad, or in red to show that one is happy. It is true, to carry a uniform in the schools was a tradition, but it is necessary to learn how to evolve and leave these traditions, to make evolve the world. Admittedly, there is a limit, one should not wear clothing aggressive or shocking in the public places. This is why, I would say that one has the harbour due what one wants harmed since it’s not others.

Salut,
Un premier essai de correction rapide :
 
 

Comprends pas    
 

euh.. essaie ça :
 
Because in democraty everyone should have the right to wear whatever they like
 

Moreover, as seen in the book, the girls were forced to wear a skirt all // year long
 

bon ok
 

I personnaly think that the way we get dressed allows us to express our personnality and identity.
 

"One" tout seul ne se dit pas. One person, one student, ok mais pas one seul
For example, wearing black clothes is a way to show his unhappiness, while red colors rather tend to show one's happiness.
 

Of course it's true thaht carring an uniform in schools has been a tradition for ages, but it is now necessary to go on and try to get these traditions to evolve and adapt to our modern environment.
 

 
Je sais pas si admittedly se dit, je crois pas.
"there is a limit" => "we must draw the line" devrait faire l'affaire
"clothing aggressive or shoking" => adj avant le nom => "aggressive or shoking clothes"
"in the public places" => pas de the pour le pluriel => "in public places" tout court
"one has the harbour due what one wants harmed since it’s not others" => là je comprends pas ce que tu veux dire.

 
Salut !

Merci