Je reprend ce que tu as mis en apportant ma correction sur les éléments que moi j'ai compris:
So, my name is ....... I am twenty four years old. I was born in august the 3rd. I am preparing a BTS this year, as a free candidate. I lived in Haute-Normandie, in a town of 2.600 (two thousand and six hundred) inhabitants, which is called R...... I live with in a house with four roomates; we share a a 4 bedroom of 800 m². Concerning pets that I might have: I have a cat «C[quote]araille» and a dog «Espagnou ".
I obtained my driving license on April 10th of this year. Therefore, I am going to be able to fill a position in the field of the real estate. Finally, at present I am currently looking for a wheelchair. (tu cherche un fauteuil roulant ?)
I have never been to England. The few times I travelled abroad, I went to visit my family in Germany or Spain
INTERETS:
I like dancing and have been practising it for 8 years. I like computers, surfing on the net,and reading. Since my friend is a fireman, I also help on a volontary basis the fire brigades to prepare all their runs. I do that often when I'm not busy with work. I like helping others, and get involved in volunteer work. I also enjoy human contact.
THIS YEAR:
This year, worked as a baby sitter because I didn't find a job in real-estate. I would like to work in a real estate agency, as an estate manager. I hold property management???. I'd move there to specialize in co-ownership, which is even though being a complex domain, is still a domain that I particularly like and that passionates me, as much as the whole real estate field. I'm confident that it's a very rich profession that will enhance my personnal skills
CONCLUSION:
To conclude, after I graduate with the BTS, I will be seeking an employment. I'm willing to do what ever it takes to find a job in a real estate agency, by proving that I have the required skills for the job.
I am also preparing a trip to Spain for 1 month in August. I am willing to master other languages because it is a valuable skill that will help increase my chances to find the position I want. As my English is not very good, I am considering taking a test in Spanish.I feel more comfortable with spanish, and of course, being able to travel often to Spain will be of great help to my learning process.
Si tu lis ce genre de texte à un entretien de recrutement, c'est un peu comme donner un baton pour se faire taper. Tu évoque explicitement tes lacunes et ne propose pas vraiment de solution pour les éliminer.
Après si c'est juste pour un exam...
Message édité par awax22 le 02-06-2009 à 19:09:58